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greenlight the survivors
watch them pull away
the crash and the call of the sirens
sang the curves of bettie page
as blind as we are
these hands will never learn braille
we never reach out
we never kiss, we never tell
oh god how I love you
I stuck you in this scrapbook heaven
in the dim lights of my bedroom
I studied the lines of your face like a fire escape
watch them pull away
the crash and the call of the sirens
sang the curves of bettie page
as blind as we are
these hands will never learn braille
we never reach out
we never kiss, we never tell
oh god how I love you
I stuck you in this scrapbook heaven
in the dim lights of my bedroom
I studied the lines of your face like a fire escape
i'll probably delete this or edit the hell out of it. It's 5 am, i can't sleep, too much on my mind and "malibu" stuck in my head.(where's my courtney love?).
I need to take more pictures. soon.
I need to take more pictures. soon.
© 2008 - 2024 goodbyeafterglow
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Lovely 
As are you, my friend.
As for suggestions and such:
I love the first stanza. A purely beautiful beginning.
I think it should be "fingers" or "fingertips" rather than hands learning braille, if you're going for the literal touch.
Maybe this fire escape and the way you study her face could be more likened to a one-way exit.. even further, maybe a one-way exit in a bombed city? As a Jew, you fall to your knees.. or something like that
Sorry, I'm never good with explaining what I mean.
As are you, my friend.As for suggestions and such:
I love the first stanza. A purely beautiful beginning.
I think it should be "fingers" or "fingertips" rather than hands learning braille, if you're going for the literal touch.
Maybe this fire escape and the way you study her face could be more likened to a one-way exit.. even further, maybe a one-way exit in a bombed city? As a Jew, you fall to your knees.. or something like that
Sorry, I'm never good with explaining what I mean.